A man oh man. This is the hugest toughest topic in digital photography. I know just enough to know I know nothin', except to say set your white point and calibrate your monitor regularly with decent software- probably the spider type thing on the screen. And choose a set of colour prefs in Photoshop, stick to them and always embed colour profiles so the next person knows how to open the file. Also you may have just set your monitor perfectly, but if it was way-wrong before it will take you days to adjust your brain to the new look- especially white point temperature.
Watch out for viewing screens in v. bright rooms, It helps to have a dark area behind the monitor. Retouchers even use a black hood around the screen to keep stray downlight off the screen. (make it yourself with gaffa and a spray painted ol' wine box). And blow off that pretty goldfish desktop and screensaver and stick to an 18% grey workspace behind your images.
Even then, what looks good in Photoshop will probably look different in the IE/Firefox window, and a small jpeg saved is sRGB will look different from the bigger file saved in Adobe 1998 RGB.
arggh.
Anyway, all that aside. Right now I'm on my lil home lappie (mac 12"powerbook) which hasn't been calibrated in 2 years.
It would be easier to judge if the two were similar scenes had a similar ratio of tones. No fair to ask us how without having the original to compare it too. Maybe#1 looks a maybe a touch warmer than #2 but I'm finding it hard to gauge, so I'm leaving colour alone for now. Maybe I'll look again on my editing screen at work..
Tonal range. #1 is suffering from having so much mid grey and not enough clean highlights to lift it. In fairness- this is likely the fault of the subject- all those pavers. The only pure white is in the dots and buildings across the bay, and there is a clean, maybe 90% highlight strip across the top of the low wall, middle distance. The blacks are heavy. I can follow the edge of frame almost to the corners before I loose the shadow detail all together. I'd like the shot better if the corners weren't so dark, but that's not what you're asking is it.. It's tough to put a muddy Holga shot up against #2. and the eye also finds it hard to distinguish between contrast and resolution.
#2 looks tonally perfect on this screen. luminous, with subtle tones reminding me of a lightly toned Selenium. A lick of perfect black in the shadow side of the tree trunk, lots of pearlescent highlights in the clouds, and probably some 255 up there but not too much. Good shadow detail in the band of distant trees. Contrast is spot on, with finely wrought detail in the grass- did you bleach that spot just left of the tree?? Nice, anyway..
dunno if any of that helps tho..